Thursday, 13 October 2016

The missing bag - Writing

A blanket of fog covered the land below with only patches of green grass and some large buildings visible. Putting my luggage on the top shelf and went to sit down in my seat.

After eating my meal I went to the bathroom. While I was in the bathroom I remembered about my Handbag. I finished from being in the bathroom and then I went to check if my handbag was still there. I opened the top shelf seeing my handbag not being there. I ask the passengers that were in my row if they have seen my handbag. All there answers to my questions were “no”. So I sat there for about 5 minutes waiting.

Then I decided to go ask the flight attendant if she could help me. “Yes, but have you looked properly on the top shelf?” The flight attendant said. “Yes, I have” I replied. Then she told me let’s go look properly. We got to my seat then we started looking.

At the top shelf we both saw a big bag. She moved the big bag… and “THERE!!” I screamed with excitement. “THANK YOU SO MUCH!!” I said to the flight Attendant, “No Worries” she replied. After all the stress I went back to my seat and sat down listening to music.


  1. Hi Caroline,

    I really liked your writing it was different from the others. I liked how you used punctuation. Do you like to listen to music ? I do.
    Keep it up ! πŸ˜πŸ˜„

    1. Thanks Saveu!!! πŸ˜πŸ˜„

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  2. Hey Caroline, I liked that you used interesting describing words to give your readers an image of what you are trying to tell us.
    Great Job!!

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  4. Hi Caroline,
    I really like how your story had lots of detail. I could connect with your story because I once went on a trip and almost lost my bag. I think you could work on your punctuation when writing your narrative story.
    Otherwise Good Job and Keep it Up!